I need to get back into the habit of posting again. Moving/writing my thesis really threw off my game. Luckily, I got a huge chunk of my thesis done so now to focus on this little blog again. Because my fall courses are starting again soon I think I’m going to focus on writing the flashiest of flash fictions, so this blog doesn’t become a chore.
Since I never actually finished my quest to write the same story in six different moods, this post will do that. Except, instead of another mood, I’m going to string all the previous posts together and edit them as if they were one story and the protagonist is going through some serious mood swings. Hopefully, it will work out nice.
The kayak drifted
steadily through the lake corridor as if it too were surveying the scene with childlike eyes. She stood on the wooden seat, not noticing unconcerned with how she made her craft sway as she took in the nature around her. Although the water was the same green as bottle glass, it offered far more wonders below its crystalline surface. Schools of fish with scales flashing like precious gems swam along her kayak. She followed them out into the water A river of diamonds, they carried her attention out on the water. She marveled at the way the forest seemed to defy the canyon ahead. The break in the mountains was no impasse. Mother Nature’s indomitable spirit sent her flora scampering down the canyon walls as if the gorge were flat earth. Their flourishing leaves swayed in the gentle wind, beckoning her deeper into the jungle.
The rough grooves in the canyon walls looked like fingerprints that if pressed to the earth would illuminate the stories of this valley. Her mind floated over the secrets the ancient eyes of the rockfaces have seen
might keep, and their imagined splendor ensnared her breath. How many legions of explorers had, like her, filled their boats with all the goods necessary for civilized survival before setting off trekking into the vibrant wilderness? How many had come to the realization now dancing with the sunlight across the lake surface: everything she needed for survival was already here. It had been here for ages before she arrived and it would endure for ages long after she passed through. All the gear and fancy gadgets she’d stuffed in her bags would only serve as technological barriers, separating her from the peace of mind offered here free of charge.
She lounged along the rows of seats, letting her arm dangle off the side
of the kayak and so her fingertips grazed the cool lake water. She closed her eyes to focus on the rhythmic lapping of water against the wooden hull. As she floated along, she felt the protective canyon walls kept eping watch over her. Their shadows fell across her body as if Mother Nature herself were laying down a weightless blanket to guide her into sleep. The shade offered her the perfect relief degree of protection from the blazing sun. Blistering heat gave way simmered to a steady, balanced warmth. The breeze caressing the lake surface carried off the last of the stifling humidity. She breathed in until her lungs could hold no more and breathed out as slowly as her kayak drifted. The rhythmic lapping gradually lessened until she lay in still waters. She made no effort to propel onward, choosing instead to linger in the moment.
As she drifted beyond the shadows, the sun whisked away her perspiration. She ran her tongue over drying lips now cracked like the stone walls surrounding her. The kayak swayed as she rose to her unsteady feet. With one hand on each side to balance herself, she climbed to the bow of the kayak. It rocked when she knelt down to rummage through her rucksack. Where was supply of water he promised to pack? Her throat itched with dehydration further irritated by the sweltering summer sun and
the lack of breeze long dead over the canyon lake. Her fingertips scraped along the bottom of the bag, knuckles dinging off everything but a water bottle. Her throat tightened as she gripped the kayak sides and twisted around. He lay along the stern, hat pulled down over his eyes and a smug grin dripping from his lips that looked far from parched. She crawled toward him, nails digging into the kayak’s paint until they stained red. He tilted his head back to digest her poisonous scowl as her unforgiving shadow smothered him.
The stiff wood walls of the kayak felt like a coffin, her black shadow a death shroud preparing to choke the life out of him.
The air became icy as s She loomed, blocking the crackling sun with a face warped into a murderous scowl and giving the air a vengeful chill. His heart pounded against his chattering rib cage as if desperate to crawl out. His muscles tightened, winding him down into bowels of the kaya yk. He was a shaking hermit crab helpless to protect his shell from a vicious stomping. He was a rolled-up hedgehog as an eagle plucked out his quills one by one. He was not long for this kayak. Their craft convulsed when she lunged for them. He released a pitiable shriek as she dug into his arms and wrenched him up. As the kayak thrashed, the water whipped over them like razor blades stinging his eyes, swamping his throat. His chest slammed into the metal-capped sides and shocked his chest. The once crisp, cool, clear lake water looked like a black abyss as she shoved his face into its depths. His lungs compressed against the metal siding and the air trumpeted out of him until the churning water simmered to died down to lifeless percolation. The kayak assumed a slight tilt as his body dangled from the side.
She sat in the center, stiff and unable to acknowledge the origins of that choppy splashing or the thunk against the kayak’s side. It
that reverberated through her body muscles and seized until it gripped her heart. She drifted onward, her breathing hushed, the world around her stunned to silence, her mind howling in its cage of flesh and bone. The rockfaces of the surrounding canyon walls glowered down at her with their repulsed rockfaces. She bolted up onto legs that quaked with such fury the kayak pitched and seized. With her face turned up to the sunlight biting tears out of her eyes, she let her jaw drop fell open. She shrieked until her breath was like his.
As her kayak drifted through the stagnant lake water, she caught the sound of another’s boat cutting the surface. The plunk of an oar pulled her attention to the shadows by the canyon walls. A fleet of kayaks fast approached hers. Their oars rose and fell in perfect time as if their rowers shared one mind. Their finely tuned movements directed the current in their favor. The lead rower cut through the water with powerful swipes with each of his kinsman close behind. Without a sound, s
She watched silently as they passed her by. When her kayak failed to bob in their rhythmic wake, she knew they were just an illusion. Each member of the fleet vanished in the stark light on the lake horizon. With even her thoughts deserting her, silence descended. She waited minutes, hours, days, for a bird to chirp over head, for a fish to nibble the water’s surface, for just a hint that someone else was out there. The whisper of the kayak’s drift quieted until it too died out.
I think this worked out alright, although I didn’t do too much editing for my first Editing Adventures post. When I write the flash fictions, I have to come up with stories off the cuff. That should give me more stuff to edit. I had to might time to think about these stories before I wrote them.